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Ask Daphne! About Two Points of View

A question today from Tamara, on the topic of queries:

I recently finished my manuscript and, after numerous revisions, finally came up with a query letter I’m happy with. In the meantime, I had a few beta readers looking at my book. On the advice of some of them, I’m considering switching the first two chapters. The book is written in dual points of view, of the boy and girl. It currently starts with the boy and, because of that, I focused on him for the query. If I switch the chapters so it starts in the girl’s POV, is it necessary to re-write the query–that way my query matches my sample pages? I thought it might be a bad idea to query in the boy’s POV, and then send sample pages written in the girl’s POV. Would that be confusing or throw an agent off? Or is it fine as long as I mention at the end of the query that the book is told in dual points of view?

Ok, you have lots of questions in there — let me see if I can get to the main point. First of all, your query should represent your entire book, not just the first chapter. While you don’t want to give away the entire plot in the query letter (save that for the synopsis), you do want to tell the reader enough of the story to set up the driving issue of the plot and the main characters. So, yes, I would advise that the query mentions the book is told in two POVs, that of a boy and a girl, and that you introduce both characters.

That being said, however, I’m leery of your comment about querying “in the boy’s POV”. This sounds to me a little too much like querying in your character’s voice, which is a big no-no for me. Your query should match the tone of your manuscript, but the voice used should be that of your own, the author. Always try to think of a query letter akin to the back cover copy of a book, or flap copy. And bear in mind that it is a business letter, and write accordingly.

Good luck!

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