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Ask Daphne! About My Query LXXXIV

valentino_jenniferskogBecause it’s Friday, I like to do things a little differently with my About My Query post. Rather than posting my thoughts first, I want YOU, my readers, to first give the author your thoughts, advice, and criticism on their query. I’ll chime in over the weekend with my comments.

Why do I do this? Not because I’m lazy, I promise! But I think authors often get “I agree with Daphne” comments on their queries, and I KNOW you guys are brilliant in your own right. I want to let you opinions SHINE! So, are you ready? Have at it!

Dear [insert agent name]:

Ingrid Stone does not mind her job. Apart from the Martian Sheep and fire-breathing lizards, being a customer service representative at Wyborg Supercenter #5279 really is not that miserable a profession.

Well, maybe it is, but Ingrid hardly considers it worth complaining about. Not when compared to what could have happened, had Earth not experienced an entire corporate takeover, courtesy of the Wyborgs. What with an incredibly pathetic disease wiping out the vast majority of the human population, the entry of this exceptionally business-like race was really a relief from the moping.

However, Ingrid has forgotten things, memories more crucial and frightening than she would like to believe. When hyperactive and over-enthusiastic alien Vogel Stratus falls through the roof of her house, Ingrid is drawn into an adventure that pulls her from the consistency of her daily routine, and into a position of constant danger . The more she is forced to confront the notions she possessed about her present and past, the more it becomes apparent that she has been sitting complacent while her last chances at freedom die. Who is truly evil? Why can she not remember two years of her life? What had she done so terrible that she would be forced to forget?

Overhead is the first in a series of five Young Adult science-fiction novels following Ingrid’s break from work in the Wyborg Supercenter, and her fight to preserve her dignity, and find love within the chaos of existence on the constant verge of extermination. Infused with dry humor in the fashion of the Douglas Adams’ Hitchhiker’s Guide to the Galaxy, the book’s focus is on the relationships and dialogue of characters fighting a battle that has already been lost. The completed manuscript runs at approximately 80,000 words.

I am currently pursuing a Bachelor of Arts in English at the University of Massachusetts Amherst, and have won awards for both poetry and short fiction on the local level. The full manuscript has been completed, and can be sent to you upon request.


Can’t wait to read what you think!

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