Comments on: Tag Lines

By: Artist Dates and Tag Lines and NYC, Oh My | Ruthanne Reid, Author {Blog}

Artist Dates and Tag Lines and NYC, Oh My | Ruthanne Reid, Author {Blog} — Thu, 11 Feb 2010 20:37:57 +0000

[...] now, with no segue, here is an excellent article by agent Kate Testerman about taglines. Taglines, you say? Why, yes – the one sentence summary of your book, the kind that usually [...]

By: Kristi

Kristi — Thu, 11 Feb 2010 15:01:07 +0000

I got my one-sentence pitch down even before I started writing the book. Now that I'm in the final revision stage of the ms, it's helped a ton with my query as well. However, I'll do my first live pitch to an agent at a conference later this year and the thought of doing it verbally instead of in written form TERRIFIES me!

By: Feliza

Feliza — Wed, 10 Feb 2010 10:26:33 +0000

Hmm… I think my brackets confused the website. Should be: "Feliza David's (insert awesome title here)"

By: Feliza

Feliza — Wed, 10 Feb 2010 10:24:55 +0000

Oh, cool. That formula helps a lot. What about…

In Feliza David's , "I Dream of Jeannie" meets John Hughes when sixteen-year-old Layla, a snarky half-genie, must grant three wishes to a popular classmate.

Wow… I think I might have a line for my query, actually. Wendy for Class President!

By: Tere Kirkland

Tere Kirkland — Wed, 10 Feb 2010 09:54:29 +0000

Outcast Romani teen Mara must accept her curse–her ability to see the spirits of the dead–if she wants to find a murderer.

By: Wendy Oliver

Wendy Oliver — Wed, 10 Feb 2010 09:21:17 +0000

Glad I could help. The formula is QueryShark's. Who is the protagonist? What choice does she face? What are the consequences of that choice?

For examples of successful taglines, I read the mouse-over descriptions of movies listed on NetFlix.

Raye – I like your first example better. It's more concise. Maybe exchange "traumatized" for "grieving"?

Delilah – Your new version is clear and sounds fun! (I still own and watch more videos tapes then DVDs, too.)

By: Derrick Camardo

Derrick Camardo — Wed, 10 Feb 2010 08:32:20 +0000

In Derrick Camardo's THE NEW ORC SOCIETY, Shooga and his clan of orcs answer the call of the high council of wizards to spread peace throughout the land, but first, the orcs will have to learn magic and manners—the latter being the most difficult.

By: Mandy

Mandy — Wed, 10 Feb 2010 07:10:23 +0000

Oh and I really appreciated your tip Wendy! I really struggle with summarizing; you definitely helped!

By: Mandy

Mandy — Wed, 10 Feb 2010 07:08:43 +0000

In Mandy Pietruszewski's Spirit Riddled, a middle grade fantasy novel, a twelve-year-old former street urchin struggling with her abandonment must learn to use her "demon"-given abilities to save the man who took her off the streets and has become her only family.

By: Tiffany Neal

Tiffany Neal — Wed, 10 Feb 2010 07:00:07 +0000

And…I spelled your wrong. That should be you're. I am an English/Grammar teacher and I crucify students for this exact mistake… *Bang head on desk*